Time : 2016-02-26 11:25:42
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Dear Alice,
It’s a great pleasure to hear from you again. How are you? Are you OK? Well, I’m fine. It’s a long time since i last wrote the letter "My Birthday Party ” to you,isn't it ? Though I am very busy with my work, I still keep in touch with you. Because, we are intimate pen-friends, aren't we? I think that your mother is very beautiful . Umm, what is your mother's name .If someone asks me : “Who do you love most?”, I will answer , I love my mother most . Let me tell you about my mother .
My mother ' full name is Nguyen Thi Loan and she is forty fifteen years old but she stills looks very beautiful . My mom is tall and slim. She has got white skin . My mother has an oval face. She has long black hair . Her eyes is black , she often sees me by smiling eyes . When she smile , she looks flowers which always attract the others. My mother is very kind,too. She is always ready to help her friends and neighbors.
She is a very good English teacher . She isn't a strict person . When I I make mistakes , my mom doesn't punish me but advised me don't this thing again. When I was 5 , I stole a pencil case because it's very beautiful and I like it very much . My mother asked me where I got it and I answered :" I picked it on the street" .Two days after , she discovered but she didn't punish me but she advised me to do the right thing. Finally, I gave it back to its owner.
That’s my mom – the person I love most. Do you like my mother .Now, it's time I stopped writing this letter. Write to me soon when you have free time and I'll have a surprising present for you. Goodbye!
Write to me soon!
Best regards,
Nhan

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Alice,
It’s a great pleasure to hear from you again. How are you? Are you OK? Well, I’m fine. It’s a long time since i last wrote the letter "My Birthday Party ” to you,isn't it ? Though I am very busy with my work, I still keep in touch with you. Because, we are intimate pen-friends, aren't we? I think that your mother is very beautiful . Umm, what is your mother's name .If someone asks me : “Who do you love most?”, I will answer , I love my mother most . Let me tell you about my mother/her .
My mother's full name is Nguyen Thi Loan and she is forty fifteen five years old but she stills looks very beautiful . My mom is tall and slim. She has got white fair skin . My mother has an oval face. She has long black hair . Her eyes is are black , she often sees me by looks at me with her smiling eyes . When she smiles , she looks like a flowers which always attracts the others. My mother is very kind,too. She is always ready to help her friends and neighbors.
She is a very good English teacher . She isn't a strict person . When I I make mistakes , my mom doesn't punish me but advised me don't not to do this thing again. When I was 5 , I stole a pencil case because it's very beautiful and I liked it very much . My mother asked me where I got it and I answered :" I picked found it on the street" .Two days after , she discovered the truth but she didn't punish me but she advised me to do the right thing. Finally, I gave it back to its owner.
That’s my mom – the person I love most. Do you like my mother .Now, it's time I stopped writing this letter. Write to me soon when you have free time and I'll have a surprising present for you. Goodbye!
Write to me soon!
Best regards,
Nhan

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