Time : 2015-11-06 21:22:47
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Dear Alice,
It's so glad to see your letter again. How are you, Alice? I will tell you about my city, where I live. I live in Hanoi, the Capital city of Vietnam. It's a very big city and it's the second biggest city in Vietnam. Hanoi is in the North of Vietnam.
In spring, Hanoi is cool and sunny. In summer, this capital city of Vietnam is very hot and sunny, too. In the season that we come back to school to start a new school year, it is windy and some time sunny. But in winter, it is always cold, rainy and windy. Each season in Hanoi have there own beauty so you can visit Hanoi anytime you want.
If you have a chance to go to visit Hanoi, you would like to visit Uncle Ho's mausoleum, Old Quarter, Van Mieu. There are many delicious new foods in Hanoi that you can try like: com lang Vong, pho, spring roll, bun cha, bun dau mam tom.
When I visit another city, I miss Hanoi very much. I am proud to be a Vietnamese. My family are proud to be Vietnamese because Vietnam’s history is very interesting, you’ll see. Hope you see my letter soon. I think our next letter is about our birthday party or our first day at school. Write me soon.
Your new friend
Mary

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Dear Alice,
It's so glad to see your letter again. How are you, Alice? I will tell you about my city, where I live. I live in Hanoi, the Capital city of Vietnam. It's a very big city and it's the second biggest city in Vietnam. Hanoi is in the North of Vietnam.
In spring, Hanoi is cool and sunny. In summer, this capital city of Vietnam is very hot and sunny, too. In the season that we come back to school to start a new school year, it is windy and some time sometimes sunny, but slightly. But in winter, it is always cold, rainy and windy. Each season in Hanoi have there has its own beauty so you can visit Hanoi anytime you want.
If you have a chance to (go to) visit Hanoi, you would like to should visit Uncle Ho's mausoleum, Old Quarter, Van Mieu. The temple of literature...There are many delicious new foods in Hanoi that you can try like: com lang Vong/ green sticky rice of Vong village, pho, spring rolls, bun cha, bun dau mam tom/Fermented shrimp paste with fried tofu and rice vermicelli .
When I visit another city, I miss Hanoi very much. I am proud to be a Vietnamese. My family are proud to be Vietnamese too because Vietnam’s history is very interesting, you’ll see. Hope you see my letter soon. I think our next letter is about our birthday party or our first day at school. Write to me soon.
Your new friend,
Mary

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