Time : 2015-11-01 18:22:11
Điểm: 9/10
Dear Alice,



I have just read your letter and now I am writing to you because I 'm very eager to tell you about my city. Reading your letter, I can find your city is so beautiful and has many places to play. Is that right ? Now, i'm going to tell you about my city. Are you nervous ?



Hồ Chí Minh City is located in the South of Vietnam. It is the most populous city in Vietnam. It's also an economic locomotive, important cultural centers and education in Vietnam.



Your city and the Northn Vietnam have 4 season, but Hồ Chí Minh city doesn't like that. It only has 2 season: dry season and rainy season. Is it strange to you ? :) In medium, Hồ Chí Minh city has 160-270 hours of sunshine per month.Over the course of a year, the temperature varies from 14 to 40 degrees Celsius. I think you never suffer the degrees over 30, is it right?



As a young city with 300 years of history, but Hồ Chí Minh city had built many buildings and owns a diverse cultures. Modern architecture in the city noted by buildings, hotels, business center like Diamond Plaza, Saigon Trade Centre,... Hồ Chí Minh city also is shopping mall and entertainment.



Ah, i've forgotten, when visiting Hồ Chí Minh city, you can't overlook some our traditional foods. Especially is Broken rice, Nam Vang noodles, goby hotpot,...If you eat them, you will love it. I'm sure.



That's all about my city. I am very eager to know how you think about Hồ Chí Minh city. I am looking forward to seeing from you.



Your friend,

Smile






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Dear Alice,
I have just read your letter and now I am writing to you because I 'm very eager to tell you about my city. Reading your letter, I can find your city is so beautiful and has many places to play. Is that right ? Now, i'm going to tell you about my city. Are you nervous curious?

Hồ Chí Minh City is located in the South of Vietnam. It is the most populous city in Vietnam. It's also an economic locomotive, important cultural and educational centers and education in Vietnam.

Your city and the Northn Vietnam have 4 season, but Hồ Chí Minh city doesn't like that. It only has 2 seasons: dry season and rainy season. Is it strange to you ? :) In medium Averagely, Hồ Chí Minh city has 160-270 hours of sunshine per month.Over the course of a year, the temperature varies from 14 to 40 degrees Celsius. I think you never suffer the degrees over 30, is it right?
As a young city with 300 years of history, but Hồ Chí Minh city had has built many buildings and owns a diverse cultures. Modern architecture in the city is noted by buildings, hotels, business center like Diamond Plaza, Saigon Trade Centre,... Hồ Chí Minh city also is has lots of shopping malls and entertainment places.
Ah, i've forgotten, when visiting Hồ Chí Minh city, you can't overlook some our traditional foods. Especially is Broken rice, Nam Vang noodles, goby hotpot,...If you eat them, you will love it. I'm sure.
That's all about my city. I am very eager to know how you think about Hồ Chí Minh city. I am looking forward to seeing hearing from you.
Your friend,

Smile

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