Time : 2015-11-05 11:50:38
Điểm: 9/10
Dear Alice,
It’s a great pleasure to hear from you again. How are you? Are you OK? Well, I’m fine. It’s a long time since last wrote the letter “Preparation for my New Academic Year” to you,isn't it ? Although I am very busy with my work, I still keep in touch with you. Because, we are intimate pen-friends, aren't we? I think that your city is very good and comfortable . Today , I'll tell you about my city - Nha Trang. It is a big city in the Central Coast .
I believe that when mentioning Nha Trang you will immediately think about Nha trang Beach. Nha trang has a beautiful beach , I think it very famous . It's attract many visitors . At the beach , there are many big umbrellas , they look like mushrooms. There are about 50 to 90 visitors come here a day . I can talk with many foreigners here . Like many other cities in the world, Nha Trang has got four seasons: spring, summer, autumn and winter. Over the course of a year, the temperature varies from 30 to 35 degrees Celsius . Now it's winter in Nha Trang , but has many visitors.
When you visiting Nha Trang I will take you to eat many many seafoods like fish , shrimp, crab , ... and you will see the life here is very friendly and happy . NhaTrang also famous about chicken rice . It's very delicious , i eat it everyday but it is very expensive .
You like it, don't you? Now, it's time I stopped writing this letter. Write to me soon when you have free time and I'll have a surprising present for you. Goodbye!
Best,
Nhan

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Dear Alice,
It’s a great pleasure to hear from you again. How are you? Are you OK? Well, I’m fine. It’s a long time since I last wrote the letter “Preparation for my New Academic Year” to you,isn't it ? Although I am very busy with my work, I still keep in touch with you. Because, we are intimate pen-friends, aren't we? I think that your city is very good and comfortable . Today , I'll tell you about my city - Nha Trang. It is a big city in the Central Coast .
I believe that when mentioning Nha Trang you will immediately think about Nha trang Beach. Nha trang has a beautiful beach , I think it is very famous . It's attracts many visitors . At the beach , there are many big umbrellas , they look like mushrooms. There are about 50 to 90 visitors coming here a day . I can talk with many foreigners here . Like many other cities in the world, Nha Trang has got four seasons: spring, summer, autumn and winter. Over the course of a year, the temperature varies from 30 to 35 degrees Celsius . Now it's winter in Nha Trang , but has there are many visitors.
When you visiting Nha Trang I will take you to eat many many seafoods like fish , shrimp, crab , ... and you will see the life here is very friendly comfortable and happy peaceful ( friendly và happy chỉ dùng cho người, chủ ngữ ở đây là the life) . NhaTrang is also famous about for chicken rice . It's very delicious , i eat it every day but it is very expensive .
You like it, don't you? Now, it's time I stopped writing this letter. Write to me soon when you have free time and I'll have a surprising present for you. Goodbye!
Best,
Nhan

Điểm 8,5. Bài có nội dung khá tốt, e tham khảo các lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng đã sửa, cố gắng hơn ở bài sau nhé.