Time : 2020-03-17 23:59:34
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Ms. James Grant,

I would like to congratulate you on knowing that you graduated from a famous university. Indeed, the Bradford Union School is a great school and I think you are an excellent student. I am sure that your parents are very proud of you. In fact, I am very impressed by your letter to me, and I appreciate everything you wrote in the letter.

Thank you for informing me in advance that there will be noises from the musical performance at your graduation party on Saturday night. In reality, I would like to tell you that I am busy these days. I have one trip this week in Singapore to discuss with my partners about the branch hotels in Raffles so you do not need to worry about the noise.

Regarding your invitation, I am sure that I will visit your house when I arrange my time. Besides, I would like to congratulate you on completing the graduation. I hope your party will be full of happiness and succeed. Wish you all best of luck and a great future ahead. Please send my best wishes to your family.

Kind regards,
Ms.Kelly

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Ms. James Grant,

I would like to congratulate you on knowing that you graduated graduating (không cần quá dài dòng) from a famous university. Indeed, the Bradford Union School is a great school and I think you are an excellent student. I am sure that your parents are very proud of you. In fact, I am very impressed by your letter to me, and I appreciate everything you wrote in the letter.

Thank you for informing me in advance that there will be noises danh từ không đếm được from the musical performance at your graduation party on Saturday night. In reality, I would like to tell you that I am busy these days. I have one trip this week in Singapore to discuss with my partners about the branch hotels in Raffles so you do not need to worry about the noise.

Regarding your invitation, I am sure that I will visit your house when I arrange my time. Besides, I would like to congratulate you on completing the graduation. I hope your party will be full of happiness and succeed cách diễn đạt ý này chưa được hợp lý, nếu succeed tương quan với full of happiness thì không đúng từ vựng và cũng không hợp lý nghĩa vì không thể vui trước sự thành công được. Wish you all best of luck and a great future ahead. Please send my best wishes to your family.

Kind regards,
Ms.Kelly

 

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