Time : 2020-01-21 23:47:25
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Ms. Beth Scarlet,

As your neighbor, I am terribly sorry to receive your letter complaining about my dog. I am writing to express my sincere apology for the inconvenience caused. It has come to my attention that this problem has really been bothering you.

Honestly speaking, I wish I could get any sympathy from you for bad actions that are caused by my dog. In fact, my husband and I often sleep deeply so we hardly hear our dog barking at night.

At your request to take my dog to the veterinarian, I am extremely sorry about that because you know, dogs are the dynamic animals without exception of my dog so it is sometimes out of my control.

In fact, I know that sleep is very important. Get enough sleep to keep your mind clear and relaxed to work effectively. Hence, I will have taken steps to prevent this problem from happening. I promise you that every night, I will wear my dog's muzzle to make sure that my dog cannot bark at night in order that you and your daughter can sleep well.

Once again, I am really sorry for the disturbance to your rest at night. I hope that you and your daughter will accept our honest apology and I am sure the situation will not happen again.

Kind regards,
Mrs. Donald

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Ms. Beth Scarlet,

As your neighbor, I am terribly sorry to receive your letter complaining about my dog. I am writing to express my sincere apology for the inconvenience that caused to you as well as your litter daughter. It has come to my attention that this problem has really been bothering you.

Honestly speaking, I wish I could get any sympathy from you for bad actions that are have been (nên dùng hiện tại hoàn thành vì hành động này đã xảy ra và kéo dài) caused by my dog. In fact, my husband and I often sleep deeply so we hardly hear our dog barking at night.

At your request to take my dog to the veterinarian, I am extremely sorry about that because you know, dogs are the dynamic animals without exception of my dog so it is sometimes out of my control. đã dùng because thì không dùng so và ngược lại, hơn nữa ý này bạn nên diễn đạt như sau sẽ hợp lý hơn: I will take my dog to the vet to have his health check and find the reason why it has barked at night recently; chứ không nên giải thích hơi thiếu trách nhiệm là vì bạn không kiểm soát được điều đó

In fact, I know that sleep is very important. Get enough sleep to keep your mind clear and relaxed to work effectively câu fragment, chưa có chủ ngữ và vị ngữ. Hence, I will have taken steps to prevent this problem from happening. I promise you that every night, I will wear my dog's muzzle to make sure that my dog cannot bark at night in order that you and your daughter can sleep well.

Once again, I am really sorry for the disturbance to your rest at night. I hope that you and your daughter will accept our honest apology and I am sure the situation will not happen again.

Kind regards,
Mrs. Donald

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