Time : 2020-01-19 00:41:41
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Beth Scarlet,

First of all, I would like to express my sincere apology to the whole of your family for all the inconveniences related to our dog which you had to suffer these days. It was our big fault when letting him create troubles for so many consecutive nights without any timely solutions.

To be honest, I feel completely sympathetic with the difficulties involved in the peculiarity of your job which requires high concentration and alertness. Hence, a sound sleep the night before is very important and essential. I really feel you when you considered to write us a letter.

Indeed, after taking our dog to the veterinary hospital this morning, he was said to have shown some of typical symptoms related to light food poisoning. Fortunately, it is not much serious so our dog could come back home soon after being injected a few of doses. Also, I was assured that he would no longer make deafening noise at night.

Once again, I heartily apologize to you. I really do hope that you will soon restore the best state of health so as to perform well at your work.

Yours sincerely,
Peter Donald

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Dear Beth Scarlet,

First of all, I would like to express my sincere apology to the whole of your family for all the inconveniences related to our dog which you had to suffer these days. It was our big fault when letting him create troubles for so many consecutive nights without any timely solutions.

To be honest, I feel completely sympathetic with the difficulties involved in the peculiarity of your job which requires high concentration and alertness. Hence, a sound sleep the night before is very important and essential. nên làm rõ những ảnh hưởng, những vấn đề của việc con chó của bạn sủa đến giấc ngủ và hiệu suất làm việc I really feel you when you considered to write dùng Ving sau consider us a letter.

Indeed, after taking our dog to the veterinary hospital this morning, he was said to have shown some of typical symptoms related to light food poisoning vấn đề sức khỏe này không hợp lý, nếu bị ngộ độc thực phẩm thì không thể kéo dài hàng tuần như vậy. Fortunately, it is not much serious, so our dog could come back home soon after being injected a few of doses. Also, I was assured that he would no longer make deafening noise at night.

Once again, I heartily apologize to you. I really do hope that you will soon restore the best state of health so as to perform well at your work.

Yours sincerely,
Peter Donald

 

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