Time : 2021-10-17 15:26:24
Điểm: 5/10
Dear Sally.

I am very happy to receive your email. It is such a long time no meet you.
The time of last summer was so great. We had unforgettable memories together.

About the books, please keep them as a gift from me. You can remember me when you see them, right? And clothes, please give them to the homeless or the disadvantaged people if you can. Thank you for doing that.

This November, I will have a performance at a music show. Will you come to encourage me? I am very happy if we can meet up there.

Please find the enclosed invitation letter.

I know you are busy but please arrange and come.

Miss you much, my dear!

Your friend,
Jo

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Sally,.

I am very happy to receive your email. It is such a long time no meet you since I last met you.
The time of last summer was so great. We had unforgettable memories together. Cần Chia sẻ với sự bận rộn công việc của cô ấy

nên chia sẻ rõ ràng hơn về việc việc bạn bỏ quên mấy cái áo và sách ở nhà cô ấy (bạn quên thế nào, tại sao bạn lại không đến lấy hay hỏi cô ấy) About the books, please keep them as a gift from me. You can remember me when you see them, right? And clothes, please give them to the homeless or the disadvantaged people if you can. Thank you for doing that.

This November, I will have a performance at a music show. Will you come to encourage me? I am very happy if we can meet up there.

Please find the enclosed invitation letter.

I know you are busy but please arrange and come.

Miss you much, my dear!

Your friend,
Jo

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Điểm: 5.5