Time : 2021-10-04 22:21:30
Điểm: 5/10
Dear Jacky
How is your ankle now? I’m really concerned about your broken ankle. Would it affect your health and your daily activities? I wonder how your health is now?

And thank you for your letter that tells me your circumstance currently. You don’t need to feel sorry for me because you can't go out with me on Friday. Your health is more important than it. If you need anything help, please let me know. I’m always ready to help you whenever you need me. I just want you to know I am your true friend.

After reading your mail, honestly, I was kind of a little disappointed because I would not hang out with you on Friday. I have been looking for that day a lot to have a great time with you, to share with you many interesting things about the play that we will watch on Friday.

But after all, I absolutely agree with you that you should not go outside for a while. You should relax and take care of your health. I understand because you are my sincere friend.

After all, thank you for giving me a chance to go out with Shirley. You are right it is such a long time I have not seen her so that I am thankful you arranged the special night for me and Shirley on Friday. I hope everything will be nice, and also we can get along well after that. I will tell you all the things that night.

Furthermore, I love your strength, if anyone is strong enough to recover, it’s you. I know you can get over it soon, and we will have a great time together soon.

Stay in your health, be strong, be positive, be optimistic.

I am looking forward to hearing your better health.

Your best friend,

Kate

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Jacky
How is your ankle now? I’m really concerned about your broken ankle. Would it affect your health and your daily activities? I wonder how your health is now?

And thank you for your letter that tells me your circumstance currently mục đích chính của thư là thông báo sẽ không đi xem kịch được chứ không phải nói về hoàn cảnh. You don’t need to feel sorry for me because you can't go out with me on Friday. Your health is more important than it. If you need anything help, please let me know. I’m always ready to help you whenever you need me. I just want you to know I am your true friend.

After reading your mail, honestly, I was kind of a little disappointed because I would not hang out with you on Friday. I have been looking for that day a lot to have a great time with you, to share with you many interesting things about the play that we will watch on Friday. 

But after all, I absolutely agree with you that you should not go outside for a while. You should relax and take care of your health. I understand because you are my sincere friend. nguyên nhân, kết quả chưa tương xứng

After all, thank you for giving me a chance to go out with Shirley. You are right it is such a long time I have not seen her so that I am thankful you arranged the special night for me and Shirley on Friday câu run-on, có nhiều ý trong câu, chưa đúng ngữ pháp. I hope everything will be nice, and also we can get along well after that. I will tell you all the things that night.

Furthermore, I love your strength, if anyone is strong enough to recover, it’s you diễn đạt lại để làm rõ ý. I know you can get over it soon, and we will have a great time together soon.

Stay in your health, be strong, be positive, be optimistic. diễn đạt lại ý

I am looking forward to hearing your better health.

Your best friend,

Kate

Bài viết của bạn diễn đạt ý chưa rõ ràng, nên chú ý luyện viết nhiều hơn. Về nội dung, cơ bản bạn đã phản hồi được nội dung chính, song có 1 số chi tiết bạn chưa phản hồi như thời gian biểu của Shirley, kế hoạch hẹn xem kịch với cô ấy. Bạn hãy cố gắng nhiều hơn nhé.