Time : 2021-09-26 07:46:57
Điểm: 6/10
Dear Adib,



I feel regrettable when you couldn't attend this performance which make you excited before. And I admit you when you put your work on top prioritize.

I also heard about the concert held at the Azadi Concert Hall on Monday next week and I very expected his latest album because this is a special album for us after two years when he disappeared. But unfortunately, I couldn't buy the ticket because of the high demands.

Adib, you know, I can't control my happiness when I hear your offer. Thank you so much, Adib. Do you mind if I have your ticket on Wednesday at 9 pm?

Again, I want to describe my gratefulness when you gave way for me and I hope that you will have success in this contract.

Sincerely,


Tom Haward.

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Adib,


I feel regrettable when you couldn't attend this performance chưa có thông tin về buổi hòa nhạc nên cần chỉ rõ không dùng this + N which makes chia động từ theo chủ ngữ ngôi thứ ba số ít you excited before. And I admit you when you put your work on top prioritize.

I also heard about the cụ  thể tên buổi hòa nhạc concert held at the Azadi Concert Hall on Monday next week and I very không dùng very với động từ expected his latest album because this is a special album for us after two years when he disappeared. But unfortunately, I couldn't buy the ticket because of the high demands.

Adib, you know, I can't control my happiness when I hear your offer to ...(diễn đạt ý: tặng vé). Thank you so much, Adib. Do you mind if I have your ticket on Wednesday at 9 pm? nên khẳng định chứ không hỏi

Again, I want to describe express my gratefulness when you gave way for me for + danh từ and I hope that you will have success in this contract.

Sincerely, dùng văn phong formal


Tom Haward.

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Điểm: 5.5