Time : 2021-09-28 23:32:14
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Adib,

It has been such a long time since I heard from you. I hope you are doing well there. To be honest, I am surprised to know that you are going to offer me the ticket to the upcoming Arash concert on Monday next week. In fact, I know you adore the singer Arash so you spent money on a ticket to see him perform. Unfortunately, because you have to meet a client in Turkey, you cannot go see him perform. I am so sorry for you.

As you know, I am a big fan of Arash. I love his performance style and his songs are so good that I can listen to them several times without getting bored. However, I am afraid that I cannot come to see this music concert.

Indeed, my parents are going to organize their 40th wedding anniversary next Monday. Thus, I have to go back to my house to participate in my parents' wedding anniversary because I do not want to dishearten my parents so they always expect my presence. Moreover, I have not seen my parents and my brother and my sister for a long time and this is a good opportunity for me to reunite with my family members. I hope you understand and sympathize with me.

Finally, I am sorry for refusing to accept the precious concert ticket that you suggest to offer me. I am sorry about this. However, I will plan to meet you after you come back to the city when we will go to see music together. Besides, you are a highly intelligent man, so I believe that you will enter into a contract with your customer during this business trip to Turkey. I wish your business would always go smoothly.

Yours,
Tom

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Dear Adib,

It has been such a long time since I heard from you. I hope you are doing well there. To be honest, I am surprised to know that you are going to offer dùng hiện tại tiếp diễn chứ không phải tương lai gần me the ticket to the upcoming Arash concert on Monday next week. In fact, I know you adore the singer Arash so you spent money on a ticket to see him perform. Unfortunately, because you have to meet a client in Turkey, you cannot go to see him perform. I am so sorry for you.

As you know, I am also a big fan of Arash. I love his performance style and his songs are so good that I can listen to them several times without getting bored. However, I am afraid that I cannot come to see this music concert.

Indeed, my parents are going to organize their 40th wedding anniversary next Monday. Thus, I have to go back to my house to participate in my parents' wedding anniversary because I do not want to dishearten my parents so they always expect my presence không thể vừa dùng because và so, nên tách câu để tránh rối ý . Moreover, I have not seen my parents and my brother and my sister for a long time and this is a good opportunity for me to reunite with my family members. I hope you understand and sympathize with me.

Finally, I am sorry for refusing to accept to get/ receive the precious concert ticket that you suggest to offer me. I am sorry about this. However, I will plan to meet you after you come back to the city when [removed]không dùng mệnh đề trạng ngữ mà dùng mệnh đề độc lập với and, hơn nữa chú ý không dùng thì tương lai sau mệnh đề trạng ngữ) we will go to see music together. Besides, you are a highly intelligent man, so I believe that you will enter into a contract with your customer during this business trip to Turkey không cần thiết. I wish your business would always go smoothly.

Yours,
Tom

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