Time : 2021-09-21 21:40:52
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Mike Johnson,
I would like to thank you for your letter informing us about the problems that you meet in my fitness center. I had pragmatically verified the female locker room. Accordingly, I acknowledge that it have some issues as you had mentioned before. In hectic hours, there are hairs and dirt on the floor of the toilet and some necessary areas. In addition, some restrooms are lacked of paper, which poses an uncomfortable feeling for you as well as other customers. I apologize to you for this inconvenient fact.
I had asked my staff and they said that those problems were attributed to a reason which they were overwhelmed due to a large number of customers. Therefore, they are not able to simultaneously clean all the restrooms and the essential areas. I am thankful to you as you put forward some useful ways for me to address the problems. I accredit that I do not hire enough staff so I will boost the recruitment to ensure my center’ cleaness and hygine. Besides, I will increase some staff and remind them to guarantee that papers and the cleanliness of the toilets will be available all the times.
As far as the gesture of our regret, I would like to give you a week using our service without fee. When do you come to my fitness center? Please tell me, I hope to have a chance to do a workout with you.
I am looking forward to hearing from you
Yours faithfully,
Xuan Mai.

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Dear Mike Johnson,
I would like to thank you for your letter informing us about the problems with ...(vấn đề gì) that you meet in my fitness center. I had dùng quá khứ đơn với hành động đã xảy ra và hoàn tất trong quá khứ pragmatically verified the female locker room. Accordingly, I acknowledge that it have some issues as you had mentioned before. In hectic hours, there are hairs and dirt on the floor of the toilet and some necessary areas. In addition, some restrooms are lacked of paper, which poses an uncomfortable feeling for you as well as other customers. I apologize to you for this inconvenient fact.
I had asked my staff and they said that those problems were attributed to a reason which they were overwhelmed due to a large number of customers. Therefore, they are not able to simultaneously clean all the restrooms and the essential areas. I am thankful to you as you put forward some useful ways for me to address the problems. I accredit that I do not hire enough staff so I will boost the recruitment to ensure my center’s cleaness and hygine. Besides, I will increase some staff and remind them to guarantee that papers and the cleanliness of the toilets will be available all the times.
As far as the gesture of our regret, I would like to give you a week using our service without fee. When do you come to my fitness center? Please tell me, I hope to have a chance to do a workout with you.không cần thiết
I am looking forward to hearing from you
Yours faithfully,
Xuan Mai.

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