Time : 2021-08-17 23:59:18
Điểm: 6/10
Dear Robin Singh,

I am very happy to hear that you are interested in taking my Japanese conversation course. To be honest, I am very glad to see that you have an attitude to learn, improve and love Japanese. Besides, thank you to your teacher Mr. Jonathon Kyle for introducing me as a Japanese teacher and thank you for trusting me to learn Japanese. I will do my best to help you learn this foreign language well within the shortest time period.

As you know, in order to learn any foreign language well, you should first learn how to pronounce it, and then you will learn communication lessons. Hence, when you study with me, I will teach you carefully. I will teach pronunciation first because the pronunciation is very important, then I will teach communication later.

According to what you wrote in your letter, you want to take a Japanese communication course and you want to know when it will start. Therefore, I am sending you the brochure which is attached to this email. All of the information is shown in it. Thus, I recommend you should register for this course as soon as possible because the number of trainees in one class is limited. The registration time is from 24th to 31th of August, 2021 at 8 AM – 5 PM, at 24 Abbey Rise Street, Tokyo.

Actually, this course is for learners who particularly aim to learn and mainly develop their conversation skills. In other words, joining this Japanese communication course, you will familiarize yourself with the skills of using Japanese at work such as discussion, negotiation and presentation. Therefore, I am sure that you can speak confidently Japanese fluently within 6 months.

Finally, I hope you will love this foreign language. If you have any questions about the starting date of the course, please do not hesitate to contact me. I am available at the moment and will reply to you as soon as possible.

Best regards,
Mr. Haruki

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Robin Singh,

I am very happy to hear that you are interested in taking my Japanese conversation course. To be honest, I am very glad to see that you have an attitude your passion to learn, improve and love your Japanese skill. Besides, I also want to thank you to your teacher Mr. Jonathon Kyle for introducing me as a Japanese teacher to you and thank you for trusting me who will help you to learn Japanese. I will do my best to help you learn this foreign language well within the shortest time period.

As you know, in order to learn any foreign language well, you should first learn how to pronounce it, and then you will learn communication lessons. Hence, when you study with me, I will teach you carefully. I will teach pronunciation first because the pronunciation is very important, then I will teach communication later.ý này bạn nên thay bằng ý cần chuẩn bị cái gì (như sách, băng, đĩa ...) để học thì sẽ hay hơn là bạn sẽ dạy gì, dạy như thế nào

According to what you wrote in your letter, you want to take a Japanese communication course and you want to know when it will start. Therefore, I am sending you the brochure which is attached to this email. All of the information is shown in it. Thus, I recommend you should register for this course as soon as possible because the number of trainees in one class is limited. The registration time is from 24th to 31th of August, 2021 at 8 AM – 5 PM, at 24 Abbey Rise Street, Tokyo.

Actually, this course is for learners who particularly aim to learn and mainly develop their conversation skills. In other words, joining this Japanese communication course, you will familiarize yourself with the skills of using Japanese at work such as discussion, negotiation and presentation. Therefore, I am sure that you can speak confidently Japanese fluently within 6 months.

Finally, I hope you will love this foreign language. If you have any questions about the starting date of the course, please do not hesitate to contact me. I am available at the moment and will reply to you as soon as possible.

Best regards,
Mr. Haruki

Nhìn chung, bạn nắm được yêu cầu về nội dung và có hướng phản hồi đúng. Tuy nhiên, có 1 số ý bạn nên lưu ý diễn đạt và chọn lọc để ý cô đọng hơn. Hơn nữa, bạn cần phản hồi sự khen ngợi của anh ấy và người thầy của anh ấy đối với bạn; mục đích học tiếng Nhật của anh ấy để có hướng phản hồi đầy đủ hơn nhé.