Time : 2021-01-01 23:28:24
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Linda Grace,

Thank you very much for your nice regards. In reality, they were the most wonderful moments that I will never forget in the whole of my life. Going through a lot of hardship and effort, I finally become a mother.

As I've always prayed, the baby was born safely with a good health. My daughter is a very lovely girl with brown eyes as my husband's and small lips like me. She is such a lucky child to be born in all the love and welcome from everyone, including you. I feel really grateful for this as well as the appearance of her in this world.

I am in good condition of health now but for the convenience of both of us, you can come to my house to visit me and my baby next weekend. I believe that she will very happy to meet you. Before that, however, hope that you will soon finish your work successfully and safely return to our home city.

Looking forward to seeing you. Take care.

Cheers,
Jessica

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Linda Grace,

Thank you very much for your nice regards nên rõ ràng hơn là thư hỏi thăm, sự cầu nguyện cho bạn khi sinh đẻ .... In reality, they were là cái gì? cần nhắc đến cụ thể the most wonderful moments that I will never forget in the whole of my life. Going through a lot of hardship and effort (cụ thể việc đau đớn khi sinh con), I finally become a mother.

As I've always prayed, the baby was born safely with a good health. My daughter is a very lovely girl with brown eyes as my husband's and small lips like me. She is such a lucky child to be born in all the love and welcome from everyone, including you. I feel really grateful for this as well as the appearance of her in this world.

đề cập đến nguyên nhân cô ấy không có mặt ở bên bạn khi sinh và thông cảm với điều đó. I am in good condition of health now but for the convenience of both of us, you can come to my house to visit me and my baby next weekend. I believe that she will very happy to meet you thể hiện cảm xúc của bạn. Before that, however, hope that you will soon finish your work successfully and safely return to our home city.

Looking dùng động từ nguyên thể ở câu mệnh lệnh forward to seeing you. Take care.

Cheers,
Jessica

Bạn phản hồi khá rõ ràng và đầy đủ nội dung, song có 1 số ý bạn nên chú ý làm rõ ràng ý hơn, chú ý ngữ pháp. Hơn nữa, bạn cũng có thể làm rõ hơn 1 số nội dung như gợi ý ở trên.

Điểm: 7.5