Time : 2021-01-05 23:58:42
Điểm: 8/10
Dear Linda Grace,

Thank you for your hearty congratulations to me regarding my new baby. At the moment, there is a nice angel in my small family. My angel is very cute. Her face is chubby. She has beautiful eyes like me. Especially, she is always in opening smile lovely. Actually, this is the first time, I have just became a mother, so I cannot avoid an eager feeling, and I was very clumsy in care for my daughter. Fortunately, my mother has helped me to care of her lovely grandchild, so she has suckled very much. Now, my baby is very strong and developed very good.

Currently, I am still in the hospital. I am on the 4th floor, room 402 B. Due to my caesarean, I am weak very much. Therefore, I have to stay in hospital for 3 more days to get a good care from doctor before going home instead of 14 days. Therefore, when you go back the country, if you have spare time, you can visit me as well I will be glad to meet you.

Once again, thank you so much for your congratulation. I am looking forward to your coming to share my happiness. Please give my best regards to your parents and your small family. I wish you luck in your work and may God always bless you.

Best,
Jessica

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Dear Linda Grace,

Thank you for your hearty congratulations to me regarding my new baby. At the moment, there is a nice angel in my small family. My angel is very cute. Her face is chubby. She has beautiful eyes like me. Especially, she is always in opening smile lovely chú ý cách dùng cụm danh từ. Actually, this is the first time, I have just became dùng cột 3 đối với hiện tại hoàn thành a mother, so I cannot avoid an eager feeling, and I was very clumsy in care for my daughter. Fortunately, my mother has helped me to care of for her lovely grandchild, so she has suckled very much. Now, my baby is very strong and developed very good diễn đạt ý lớn hơn mỗi ngày, không dùng động từ develop.

Currently, I am still in the hospital. I am on the 4th floor, room 402 B. Due to my caesarean, I am weak very much. Therefore, I have to stay in hospital for 3 more days to get a good care from doctor before going home instead of 14 days không cần thiết. Therefore, when you go back the country, if you have spare time, you can visit me at any time as well I will be glad to meet you.

Once again, thank you so much for your congratulation. I am looking forward to your coming to share my happiness. Please give my best regards to your parents and your small family. I wish you luck in your work and may God always bless you.

Best,
Jessica

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Điểm: 7.5