Time : 2020-12-15 23:56:18
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Sameed Qureshi,

I would like to express my sincerest apology to you for my lack of attention to the drinking water everyday when you are joining our school soccer team. Actually, I absolutely had not known that the faucet is broken which makes you dehydrated during the practice. As a result, you are hospitalized due to dehydration. Honestly, I am extremely worried about your health when the tournament is coming. I always hope that your health will go well. As the president of the college, I am ready to take responsibility for this matter.

In fact, I can fully understand how difficult it was when you practiced hard but when you turned on the faucet there was no fresh water to drink. Therefore, the first thing I need to do is I will go to the school yard to check and see how the faucet is broken. If it is badly damaged, I will call a workman to replace it immediately . I am sure that you will have enough drinking water as soon as possible.

Once again, I would like to express my apology for these above incidents and I am sure that I will not let the same things happen. I hope that you and your team will win the upcoming match.

Kind regards,
Shannon Brown

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Sameed Qureshi,

I would like to express my sincerest apology to you for my lack of attention to the drinking water everyday when you are joining our school soccer team. Actually, I absolutely had not known nên dùng quá khứ đơn vì hành động đã xảy ra và hoàn tất trong quá khứ that the faucet is broken dùng hiện tại hoàn thành vì hành động xảy ra trong quá khứ, kéo dài đến hiện tại hoặc tương lai which makes dùng quá khứ đơn you dehydrated during the practice. As a result, you are quá khứ đơn hospitalized due to dehydration. Honestly, I am extremely worried about your health when the tournament is coming. I always hope that your health will go well. As the president of the college, I am ready to take responsibility for this matter.

In fact, I can fully understand how difficult it was when you practiced hard but when you turned on the faucet there was no fresh water to drink. Therefore, the first thing I need to do is that (mệnh đề danh ngữ sau tobe) I will go to the school yard to check and see how the faucet is quá khứ đơn broken. If it is badly damaged, I will call a workman to replace it immediately . I am sure that you will have enough drinking water as soon as possible.

Once again, I would like to express my apology for these above incidents danh từ số ít and I am sure that I will not let the same things happen. I hope that you and your team will win the upcoming match.

Kind regards,
Shannon Brown

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