Time : 2020-11-28 21:16:11
Điểm: 5/10
Dear Martin,
I hope you are doing well.
Firstly, I would like to say many thanks to you for your gift. I am touched and overwhelmed knowing that you bought me a great gift after your trip to Switzerland. You are really considerate as you notice my taste and as well my sweating problem during the summer. The wristwatch that you described extremely goes well with me. I really love its color, style and features. Once I looked for this kind of wristwatch on the internet but it has never been sold in the market here.
At weekend we don't often stay at home. My family and I usually going out somewhere. Sometimes we also get back to my hometown to visit my parents and relatives. So could you please send the watch to my office? I can't wait seeing it.
Anyways, how was your trip to Switzerland? Was it going well? I haven't ever gone there before but I learn that it is an extremely beautiful country. Therefore I will be very eager to hear you tell me about people, scenery, culture, food and all your experience during the trip there.
I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Take care and stay fine.
Best wishes.
Niro

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Dear Martin,
I hope you are doing well.
Firstly, I would like to say many thanks to you for your gift. I am touched and overwhelmed knowing dùng to V sau tính từ that you bought me a great gift after your trip to Switzerland. You are really considerate as you notice my taste and as well my sweating problem during the summer. The wristwatch that you described extremely goes well with me. I really love its color, style and features. Once I looked for this kind of wristwatch on the internet but it has never been sold in the market here. không cần chi tiết này
At weekend we don't often stay at home. My family and I usually going out somewhere. Sometimes we also get back to my hometown to visit my parents and relatives. không cần thiết So could you please send the watch to my office? I can't wait seeing it.
Anyways, how was your trip to Switzerland? Was it going well? I haven't ever gone there before but I learn that it is an extremely beautiful country. Therefore, I will be very eager to hear you tell me about people, scenery, culture, food and all your experience during the trip there.
I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Take care and stay fine.
Best wishes,.
Niro

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Điểm: 4.5