Time : 2020-09-10 18:03:38
Điểm: 6/10
Dear Andy Smith,

I am very happy to hear that your family is still good these days. As it is turn out, your little son very interested in my drawings, also he is my big fan, makes me feel supported. I do not know how to express my thanks.. I truly value your son's contribution to the funny cartoon drawings.

It is very kind of you that you intend to invite me to your son's birthday party next week on the 4th of December at your house. You know how much I like this vibrant party very much and certainly I would really like to come on time. But could you show me exactly the way to your house?

It is amazing to meet people who you invited to the party. Although I am a bit worried because I only know some of them, whom you told me in your letter, I am trying my best to get on well with other people at the party. I will buy some lemonade, crisps and some beverages for this special occasion. I believe that these things will make the party more enjoyable for the guests. Certainly, on that day, I will have a surprising gift for your lovely son. If I can, I will get to your house early so as to help you prepare for the party.

Please send our best wishes to your son. Hope that every good things will come to him in his new age. We also wish that your family would have a sweet and memorable night to celebrate such a special occasion.

Kind regards,

Traverse

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Dear Andy Smith,

I am very happy to hear that your family is still good these days. As it is turn out không dùng tobe trước động từ thường, your little son thiếu tobe very interested in my drawings, also he is my big fan, makes me feel supported có quá nhiều ý trong câu, chú ý diễn đạt, tách ý để tránh câu run-on. I do not know how to express my thanks.. I truly value your son's contribution to the funny cartoon drawings.

It is very kind of you that you intend to invite me to your son's birthday party next week on the 4th of December at your house. You know how much I like this vibrant party very much and certainly I would really like to come on time. But could you show me exactly the way to your house?

It is amazing for me to meet people who you invited to the party. Although I am a bit worried because I only know some of them, whom you told me in your letter, I am trying my best to get on well with other people at the party không cần thiết. I will buy some lemonade, crisps and some beverages for this special occasion. I believe that these things will make the party more enjoyable for the guests. Certainly, on that day, I will have a surprising gift for your lovely son. If I can, I will get to your house early so as to help you prepare for the party.

Please send our best wishes to your son. Hope that every good things will come to him in his new age. We also wish that your family would have a sweet and memorable night to celebrate such a special occasion.

Kind regards,

Traverse

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Điểm: 6.5