Time : 2020-09-15 23:31:49
Điểm: 6/10
Dear Mr. Andy Smith,

I am really glad when I received your letter. My family and I are healthy and everything is still good. Reading your letter reminds me of the old days I attended your son's full month celebration, and now your son is 6 years old. Your son has grown so fast. The more he has grown, the older we are!

Thank you very much for your lovely invitation. Your invitation is great, I love it. But I am afraid that I have to refuse your invitation because on 4th of December, my family will celebrate my parents’ silver jubilee wedding anniversary. I know for how long you had been planning for this party. I am so sorry. However, I hope the party goes well and you will have a nice time spending with your friend and relatives.

To be honest, I am so glad to hear that your son loves the cartoon pictures that I drew. I really did not expect my funny drawings to make him so passionate; I do not think that I have such a cute kid fan. I am very happy. Therefore, I will draw a cute picture my signature as my birthday gift for your son. I hope he likes it!

Once again, I am sorry for not attending your son’s birthday party. I know you are very sad because of my absence. I am really sorry. Please convey my wishes to your family and happy your son's birthday. I wish your son a healthy life and a brilliant future ahead.

Yours,
Traverse

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Mr. Andy Smith,

I am really glad when I received your letter. My family and I are healthy and everything is still good. (Reading) bản thân từ your letter đã rõ thông tin rồi, từ reading có thể omit) your letter reminds me of the old days I attended your son's full month celebration, and now your son is 6 years old. Your son has grown so fast.không cần thiết The more he has grown, the older we are!

Thank you very much for your lovely invitation. Your invitation is great, I love it. I would love to go, But I am afraid that I have to refuse your invitation because on 4th of December, my family will celebrate my parents’ silver jubilee wedding anniversary. I know for how long you had been planning for this party. I am so sorry. nên diễn đạt ý: mặc dù tôi không thể tham dự bữa tiệc, nhưng tôi thấy kế hoạch của bạn rất hoàn hảo (giải thích cụ thể) However, I hope the party goes well and you will have a nice time spending with your friend and relatives.

To be honest, I am so glad to hear that your son loves the cartoon pictures that I drew. I really did not expect my funny drawings to make him so passionate; I do not think that I have such a cute kid fan nên dùng dạng khẳng định để khẳng định đam mê của bạn và tài năng vẽ tranh của bạn chứ không dùng dạng phủ định bởi nó thể hiện sự nghi ngờ chính đam mê và khả năng của bạn. I am very happy. Therefore, I will draw a cute picture with my signature as my birthday gift for your son. I hope he likes it!

Once again, I am sorry for not attending your son’s birthday party. I know you are very sad because of my absence. I am really sorry. Please convey my wishes to your family and happy happiness to your son's birthday. I wish your son a healthy life and a brilliant future ahead.

Yours,
Traverse

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Điểm: 6.5