Time : 2020-09-03 23:42:29
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Andy Moore,

I am writing this letter in response to your letter. Brutally honest, I am very glad to receive your letter that you have sent me such a hearty compliment with reference to the success of this year's annual executive conference. I am on cloud nine to know that everybody and you as well have enjoyed it.

In fact, before the day of the conference, I had to prepare for it a lot, so that everybody could take a fancy and take interest in it. Most of the time I spent is on the theme “Stronger as a team”. I wanted to share everybody a massage "No man is an island" and the team-building as well as the cooperation is of great importance. Additionally, I wanted everybody to easily come to my reference in public transportation, therefore, I tried to find a location which is suitable as well as affordale for everybody.

Once again, I am in seven heaven on the grounds that what I contributed to the conference beared fruits and everybody took interest in it. Besides, I would like to give my my innermost thank for your encouragement as well as those honest feedbacks. In truth, it has given myself a great deal of motivation and huge enthusiasm.

I am looking forward to seeing you again.

Yours faithfully,
Jeremy

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Dear Andy Moore,

I am writing this letter in response to your letter. Brutally honest, I am very glad to receive your letter that you have sent me such a hearty compliment with reference to the success of this year's annual executive conference. I am on cloud nine to know that everybody and you as well have enjoyed it.

In fact, before the day of the conference, I had to prepare a lot for it a lot, so that everybody could take a fancy and take interest in it. Most of the time I spent is dùng quá khứ đơn với hành động xảy ra và hoàn tất trong quá khứ on the theme “Stronger as a team”. I wanted to share everybody a massage dùng từ sai nghĩa "No man is an island" and the team-building as well as the cooperation is of great importance. Additionally, I wanted everybody to easily come to my reference in public transportation, therefore, I tried to find a location which is suitable as well as affordale for everybody.

Once again, I am in seven heaven on the grounds that what I contributed to the conference beared fruits and everybody took interest in it. Besides, I would like to give my my innermost thank for your encouragement as well as those honest feedbacks. In truth fact hoặc có thể dùng actually = in fact, it has given myself a great deal of motivation and huge enthusiasm.

I am looking forward to seeing you again.

Yours faithfully,
Jeremy

 

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Điểm: 7.5