Time : 2020-09-04 13:29:45
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Andy,

I hope you are well. Thank you so much about your compliment for me. I am very pleased and honored when I received your email. I always prepare a backup situation whether our CEO attend the conference or not.

I know this year's annual executive conference which is very important with all employees of our company. This is a special conference to honor the employees who dedicated themselves to the company. Besides, company's tradition has always been "the strength of teamwork is the strength of the company", so I chose the theme “Stronger as a team”. I am so glad to hear that our CEO of the company is pleased with this theme and everyone can easily attend the conference. Before the conference, I searched many good places for the conference but people could only get there by taxi. This place is not a good place but it is the best location as it is close to many types of public transport.

Once again, I would like to say thank you so much for your compliments that are my motivation to organize other events better. I am preparing some plans for annual inter-departmental sports and annual corporate picnics. Please let me know if you have any request for next events.

Best regards,

Jeremy

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Dear Andy,

I hope you are well. Thank you so much about for your compliment for me. I am very pleased and honored when I received your email. I always prepare dùng quá khứ đơn vì hành động đã xảy ra và hoàn tất a backup situation whether our CEO attend the conference or not.nên bổ sung thêm ý: tôi đã nỗ lực rất nhiều để support cho ý chuẩn bị cho tính huống sếp có đến hay không ở trên

I know this year's annual executive conference which is very important with all employees of our company. This is a special conference to honor the employees who dedicated themselves to the company. Besides, company's tradition has always been following the slogan named (nên dùng dạng rút gọn mệnh đề quan hệ) "the strength of teamwork is the strength of the company", so I chose the theme “Stronger as a team”. I am so glad to hear that our CEO of the company is pleased with this theme and everyone can easily attend the conference. Before the conference, I searched many good places for the conference but people could only get there by taxi. This place is not a good place but dùng not only ... but also it is the best location as it is close to many types of public transport.

Once again, I would like to say thank you so much for your compliments that are my motivation to organize other events better. I am preparing nên dùng tobe willing to V để thể hiện thiện chí đồng ý làm việc này some plans for annual inter-departmental sports and annual corporate picnics. Please let me know if you have any request for next events.

Best regards,

Jeremy

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