Time : 2020-11-08 05:30:35
Điểm: 7/10
In my opinion, I strongly agree that there is less communication between family members than in the past. First of all, with the development of our life, we seem too busy with our work. Parents always spend their time working and earning money for their family. They try their best to earn money for their family. And they think that having much money will bring happiness to their family. Therefore, they have little time to play with their children or share anything with other members in their family. Second, There is so many entertainment equipment in our free time like televisions, smart phones, computers,...so on. Whenever we have free time, we spend on surfing the internet to watch TV, play video games, so we have little time to speak together. I remember that when I was young, after dinner we talked together. My sisters and I talked about our lessons on our previous days to our parents. We had great time together. But now, we sit in our rooms. My sisters play video games or listen to music. And I chat with my friends in the internet. Therefore we seldom speak together. Moreover, There is too much homework for children at home. They have to spend a lot of time studying and studying, so they talk with their parents less and less. Nevertheless, we do not know that there is less communication between family members, there will be less happiness in our family. Therefore, we should spend more time together.

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In my opinion, I strongly agree that there is less communication between family members than in the past. First of all, with the development of our life, we seem too busy with our work. Parents always spend their time working and earning money for their family. They try their best to earn money for their family. And they think that having much money will bring happiness to their family. Therefore, they have little time to play with their children or share anything with other members in their family. Second, There is so many entertainment equipment in our free time like televisions, smart phones, computers,...so on. Whenever we have free time, we spend on surfing the internet to watch TV, play video games, so we have little time to speak together. I remember that when I was young, after dinner we talked together. My sisters and I talked about our lessons on our previous days to our parents. We had great time together. But now, we sit in our rooms. My sisters play video games or listen to music. And I chat with my friends on the internet. Therefore we seldom speak together. Moreover, There is too much homework for children at home. They have to spend a lot of time studying and studying, so they talk with their parents less and less. Nevertheless, we do not know that when there is less communication between family members, there will be less happiness in our family. Therefore, we should spend more time together.

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