Time : 2020-10-11 18:06:57
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Some people believe that developed countries do not need further development of the economy because it will not bring any happier to citizens. I absolutely disagree with this statement.
Developed countries do not mean there are no poor people there. There are poor and rich people, disable and the elder people parallel existence in any societies. Thus, the developed countries also are making their effort to boost their economic development. It helps to narrow the gap between rich people and poor people towards a more equal society. Poor people, as well as disabled people, will also be happier since they get more welfare.
Developing countries are trying to develop the economy. They may surpass over the developed countries replacing the position in the world. Therefore, further economic development will help rich countries keeping their influence on other countries as well as enhance their power in the world. As citizens of developed countries, people will get more benefits not only in their country but also in foreign countries. For example, American people can go to certain areas without Visa. It is obvious that citizens of rich countries will be happier if their country has further economic development.
To sum up, people will be happier if their country has a development economy even in rich countries.

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Some people believe that developed countries do not need further development of the economy because it will not bring any happier to citizens. I absolutely disagree with this statement.

Developed countries do not mean there are no poor people there. There are poor and rich people, disable and the elder people parallel existence in any societies. Thus, the developed countries also are making their effort to boost their economic development. It helps to narrow the gap between rich people and poor people towards a more equal society. Poor people, as well as disabled people, will also be happier since they get more welfare.

Developing countries are trying to develop the economy. They may surpass over the developed countries replacing the leading position in the world. Therefore, further economic development will help rich countries keeping their influence on other countries as well as enhance their power in the world. As citizens of developed countries, people will get more benefits not only in their country but also in foreign countries. For example, American people can go to certain areas without Visa. It is obvious that citizens of rich countries will be happier if their country has further economic development.

To sum up, people will be happier if their country has a development in economy even in rich countries.

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