Time : 2020-07-23 17:42:08
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There is a reality that many people consider the only reason to work hard is to make money as the most important factor in choosing a job because the vital importance of money in our daily lives. For me, I still reckon that there are other considerations affecting our choice of professions.

Admittedly, money plays an important role in our daily lives. It not only help us pay for our basic necessities but also other educational and recreational expenditure. Without money, we cannot have comfortable lives and satisfy other requirements in our materialistic and spiritual lives. However, I must admit that there are other considerations which play an essential role in choosing a job.

First of all, the harmony and friendliness in the working environment between the bosses and their employees, and between the colleagues themselves also play a crucial importance to the happiness of the workers. Secondly, while some people only feel satisfied in their job when receiving encouragement and getting more skills and knowledge after fulfilling their duties, some employees that have ambition only feel pleased and excited when being promoted to a high position. In some cases, this happiness is more important than the one brought by high salaries. Finally, there are some people who choose their employments partly because they want to contribute to a noble cause such as doing voluntary works or doing military conscript. For example, in the wartime, many youths voluntarily serve in the army to fight for the independence of the motherland without being paid for.


All in all, although big salaries have played a crucial in our lives, I still believe that there are other factors having an important part in working hard.

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There is a reality that many people consider the only reason to work hard is to make money as the most important factor in choosing a job because of the vital importance of money in our daily lives. For me, I still reckon that there are other considerations affecting our choice of professions.

Admittedly, money plays an important role in our daily lives. It not only helps us pay for our basic necessities but also other educational and recreational expenditure. Without money, we cannot have comfortable lives and satisfy other requirements in our materialistic and spiritual lives. However, I must admit that there are other considerations which play an essential role in choosing a job.

First of all, the harmony and friendliness in the working environment between the bosses and their employees, and between the colleagues themselves also play a crucial importance to the happiness of the workers. Secondly, while some people only feel satisfied in their job when receiving encouragement and getting more skills and knowledge after fulfilling their duties, some employees that have ambition only feel pleased and excited when being promoted to a high position. In some cases, this happiness is more important than the one brought by high salaries. Finally, there are some people who choose their employments partly because they want to contribute to a noble cause such as doing voluntary works or doing military conscript. For example, in the wartime, many youths voluntarily serve in the army to fight for the independence of the motherland without being paid for.

All in all, although big salaries have played a crucial role in our lives, I still believe that there are other factors having an important part in for working hard.

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