Time : 2020-07-23 23:00:13
Điểm: 7/10
Finding our purposes for working diligently is always be a universal thing for our folks. Some people said that the only reason to work hard is to earn money. From my point of view, I strongly agree with this thinking for several reasons below.
For a variety of reasons, firstly, when looking deliberately in our modern society, It can not be denied the fact that treasure is a precise method to measure our success in life. Hence, whoever we are, we strive harshly in a severe competition in a light edge between becoming a winner or a loser in this stark reality. For example, in Korea, the poor are equal to some people of low social standing who could be looked down on by others, and even the poor's children could never have the same educational quality compared to the ones at the same age. That is one of the reasons why I prone to the idea that working hard is merely to earn cash.
Secondly, Though several men today have to do a job that they do not prefer, however, when thinking of making more cash so that their loved ones could get a better life condition, it could become a huge incentive to continue their current job. For instance, my father always attempts at work every day, he always busy even at the weekend, and I clearly know that all he does to give my family at best. Hence, I can feel the value of cash in our life, and that account for my strong confidence that working to earn money is the most necessary thing.
In conclusion, working hard to earn money is definitely the best choice in my life.

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Finding our purposes for working diligently is always be a universal thing for our folks. Some people said that the only reason to work hard is to earn money. From my point of view, I strongly agree with this thinking for several reasons below.

For a variety of reasons, firstly, when looking deliberately into our modern society, it cannot be denied the fact that treasure is a precise method to measure our success in life. Hence, whoever we are, we strive harshly in a severe competition in a light edge between becoming a winner or a loser in this stark reality. For example, in Korea, the poor are equal to some people of low social standing who could be looked down on by others, and even the poor's children could never have the same educational quality compared to the ones at the same age. That is one of the reasons why I prone to the idea that working hard is merely to earn cash.

Secondly, though several men today have to do a job that they do not prefer; however, when thinking of making more cash so that their loved ones could get a better life condition, it could become a huge incentive to continue their current job. For instance, my father always attempts at work every day, he is always busy even at the weekend, and I clearly know that all he does aim to give my family at best. Hence, I can feel the value of cash in our life, and that accounts for my strong confidence that working to earn money is the most necessary thing.

In conclusion, working hard to earn money is definitely the best choice in my life.

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