Time : 2020-07-05 11:15:49
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Charity organizations are vital these days, especially when the world is in crisis. However, the debate is whether they should only support their own country, or they should supply internationally. Of course, sharing is caring. Nevertheless, further discussions are required to resolve this conflict.
Firstly, why should corporations pay attention to their country only? Every citizen would do the best for their hometown, and they would hope that their people live the most sufficient life. It's part of their duty to the country and their morale. Sometimes, supplicants for their residents solely could not even add up. So, how can we think of larger territories? You cannot save others if you cannot save yourself.
Secondly, aiming at giving aid to other countries is advised. Each place is believed to have a crisis. As a result, we should all give a helping hand irrespective of race, color, origin, etc. The responsibility lying on charity organizations might be tremendous, but it's the right thing to do. Some charity funds and organizations which have done a spectacular job at this are The Bill and Melinda Gates Foundation and The Yelé Haiti Foundation (of which Angelina Jolie is the board). They have done positive changes to the world, not only to their country.
In sum, it is enough just to offer help to those in need in your country, but if possible, charity foundations should also expand their love for international friends. Every action, even little, is essential to make this world a better place.

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Charity organizations are vital these days, especially when the world is in crisis. However, the debate is whether they should only support their own countries, or they should supply aids internationally. Of course, sharing is caring. Nevertheless, further discussions are required to resolve this conflict.

Firstly, why should corporations pay attention to their countries only? Every citizen would do the best for their hometown, and they would hope that their people live the most sufficient life. It's part of their duty to the country and their morale. Sometimes, supplicants for their residents solely could not even add up???. So, how can we think of larger territories? You cannot save others if you cannot save yourself.

Secondly, aiming at giving aid to other countries is advised. Each place is believed to have a crisis. As a result, we should all give a helping hand irrespective of race, color, origin, etc. The responsibility lying on of charity organizations might be tremendous, but it's the right thing to do. Some charity funds and organizations which have done a spectacular job at this are The Bill and Melinda Gates Foundation and The Yelé Haiti Foundation (of which Angelina Jolie is the board). They have done positive changes to the world, not only to their countries.

In sum, it is enough just to offer help to those in need in your country, but if possible, charity foundations should also expand their love for international friends. Every action, even little, is essential to make this world a better place.

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