Time : 2020-07-04 15:43:09
Điểm: 7/10
There are different oppions that charity organizations should support just only their own countries or just for other countries which are in need.
To help others countries people should support their country at first. When their countries have better conditions they can help others. Further more, support domestic countries will enhance national unity. Domestic citizens feel that they are living in a safe country where they can get help. Thus, they can keep mind on their life. It also has a great meaning to reduce migration. If charity organizations offer help to people of foreign contries it will increase refugees moving these countries. At the same time, help people in their own countries will spread kind actions. There are more people doing charity.
People should not distinguish between domestic countries or foreign countries in cases of emergency. Both idividuals and organizations should focus help to people in these situations. It is not only a money value but also a humane value because it can save thousands of lives. For example, Covid-19 pandemic have caused seriously about human and property damages. Aid for money or medical equipment are necessary for countries which have been suffered diseases. Masks just are ordinary but now they become valuable objects to save human life. A wide range of masks were collected and sent for the purpose of aid.
To sum up, the aid will become extremely valuable if we put on right places. We should consider about the effect rather geographical locations. People should put the top priority in cases of emergency.

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There are different oppinions that charity organizations should support just only their own countries or just for other countries which are in need. To help others countries people should support their countries at first. When their countries have better conditions they can help others. Furthermore, supporting domestically countries will enhance national unity. Domestic citizens feel that they are living in a safe country where they can get help. Thus, they can keep mind on their life. It also has a great meaning to reduce migration. If charity organizations offer help to people of foreign countries it will increase refugees moving these countries. At the same time, helping people in their own countries will spread kind actions. There are more people doing charity. People should not distinguish between domestic countries or foreign countries in cases of emergency. Both individuals and organizations should focus on helping to people in these situations. It is not only a money financial value but also a humane value because it can save thousands of lives. For example, Covid-19 pandemic has caused seriously about human and property damages. Financial aid for money or medical equipment are necessary for countries which have been suffered from the diseases. Masks just are ordinary but now they become valuable objects to save human life. A wide range amount of masks were collected and sent for the purpose of aid. To sum up, the aid will become extremely valuable if we put on right places. We should consider about the effect rather than geographical locations. People should put the top priority in cases of emergency.

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