Time : 2020-06-06 15:23:13
Điểm: 7/10
Recently, More and more people spend money on holding their celebration as wedding party, birthday party and others. Some people think this is wasted, others think this is useful for themselves. This essay will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of this issue and give my opinion.
On the one hand, There are a huge number of advantages when you have a celebration party . Firstly, Holding a celebration party make people feeling happy. Everybody enjoys the parties and certainly the parties make them laughing and funny. Futhermore, People could see their friends at the parties and make friend with the strangers. This opens their relationship. Finally, thanks to parties, People could review their memories and the highlight in their life.
On the other hand, Holding a party bring some disadvantages. One of the main drawbacks is waste of money. People need to spend a big number of money on holding a party. For example, In 2019, The Knot - The US event organizer, said the wedding cost in the US (not including the honeymoon cost) was about $ 32,641 (VND 682 million). Last but not least, there are may useless and harmful things people could get in the party. Alcohol and drug are examples.
In conclusion, Holding a celebration brings both advantages and disadvantages but I think the positive aspects far outwweght the negative aspects.

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Recently, More and more people spend money on holding their celebration such as wedding parties, birthday parties and others. Some people think this is wasteful, others think this is useful for themselves. This essay will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of this issue and give my opinion.

On the one hand, There are a huge number of advantages when you have a celebration party . Firstly, Holding a celebration party makes people feeling happy. Everybody enjoys the parties and certainly the parties make them laughing and have funny. Furthermore, People could see their friends at the parties and make friends with the strangers. This opens broadens their relationship. Finally, thanks to parties, People could review their memories and the highlight in their life.

On the other hand, Holding a party brings some disadvantages. One of the main drawbacks is a waste of money. People need to spend a big number of money on holding a party. For example, In 2019, The Knot - The US event organizer, said the wedding cost in the US (not including the honeymoon cost) was about $ 32,641 (VND 682 million). Last but not least, there are many useless and harmful things people could get in the party. Alcohol and drug are examples.

In conclusion, Holding a celebration brings both advantages and disadvantages but I think the positive aspects far outwweighs the negative aspects.

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