Time : 2020-06-07 09:07:20
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Nowadays, we spend a lot of money on holding wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations. They give us much fun, happiness and good mentality. But is spending lots on them worthy?
Firstly, let's say about the benefits of these actions. As above, the metal benefits that they give us are quite important. You certainly want to celebrate your birthday party and invite your friends to join it, right? A country want to celebrate their Independence day anniversary for residents' gladness. They are justifiable demands. Celebrations also remind us to traditional values, such as Carnival in Brazil, Oktoberfest in Germany, Hue Festival in Vietnam..., and arouse motivation in us. Because of these reasons, I think wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations are necessary.
But in my opinion, spending too much on them is a waste of money. Many people in the middle class or lower spend thousands of dollars making their parties become elegant. Some of them even use celebrations as something to swank their luxury and richness. It's comical. Formerly, I used to ask my parents to celebrate a big birthday party, which have expensive cakes and candies, inviting many people or decorating my house beautifully with colourful bows, candles..., for me every each years. But now I know I can use this money to buy another useful things like books, calculators, good pens... and they make me happier.
In short, wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations are necessary but don't spend a lot on them.

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Nowadays, we spend a lot of money on holding wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations. They give us much fun, happiness and good mentality. But is spending lots on them worthy? Firstly, let's say about the benefits of these actions. As above, the mental benefits that they give us are quite important. You certainly want to celebrate your birthday party and invite your friends to join it, right? A country wants to celebrate their Independence day anniversary for residents' gladness. They are justifiable demands. Celebrations also remind us to of traditional values, such as Carnival in Brazil, Oktoberfest in Germany, Hue Festival in Vietnam..., and arouse motivation in us. Because of these reasons, I think wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations are necessary. But in my opinion, spending too much on them is a waste of money. Many people in the middle class or lower class spend thousands of dollars making their parties become elegant. Some of them even use celebrations as something to swank their luxury and richness. It's comical. Formerly, I used to ask my parents to celebrate a big birthday party, which had expensive cakes and candies, inviting many people or decorating my house beautifully with colourful bows, candles..., for me every each single years. But now I know I can use this money to buy another useful things like books, calculators, good pens... and they make me happier. In short, wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations are necessary but don't spend a lot on them.

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