Time : 2020-03-29 03:29:13
Điểm: 7/10
Understanding about the value of the public parks, I disagree with using them for other targets such as residential areas or develop business and boost economies. Almost people just focus on their benefits when they do business and forget we also need to live in a quality environment, especially we are destroying nature and we have to spend much more time to restore. Public parks are not only for improve our health but also for protecting environment. If we build concrete blocks more than 40-50% area of our countries, it will get a lot of consequences of flooding, global warming, air pollution.
First of all, the ecologists, psychologists and economists at Griffith University in Australia on November 12, 2019 have researched and showed that visiting parks regularly can save about 6 trillion of the worlds. Parks may help residents prevent strokes and heart disease because they can reduce stress, increase physical activities, improve sleep and enhance awareness. Therefore, governments will save the amount of budget for improving morale of residents.
Second, as we know, global warming will cause melting ices and engulfing many coastal cities in the world that we are concerning. This problem will occur in the near future makes governments must tackle by offering climate change scenarios. Maintaining green areas will help to control temperature and air conditioning. Besides, parks have advantage in drainage decrease flooding in some areas of the big cities because of low green density. Therefore, benefits of parks bring for human is great. We should not count short term to exchange our environment for developing resident areas or commercial areas to get benefit immediately but we must think about how our environment is in future if we do not have enough green areas.
As analyzed, maintaining and protecting environment is the most significant issue for developing and improving our quality life. Thus, I do not recommend that we can take some parks for targets are smaller and less important, especially it will affect our environment and we will spend a lot of money and efforts for adjusting this mistake.

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Understanding about the value of the public parks, I disagree with using them for other targets purposes such as residential areas or to develop business and boost economies. Almost all people just focus on their benefits when they do business and forget we also need to live in a quality environment, especially we are destroying nature and we have to spend much more time to restore. Public parks are not only for improving our health but also for protecting environment. If we build concrete blocks more than 40-50% area of our countries, it we will get a lot of consequences of flooding, global warming, air pollution.

First of all, the ecologists, psychologists and economists at Griffith University in Australia on November 12, 2019 have researched and showed that visiting parks regularly can save about 6 trillion of the worlds. Parks may help residents prevent strokes and heart diseases because they can reduce stress, increase physical activities, improve sleep and enhance awareness. Therefore, governments will save the amount of budget for improving morale of residents.

Second, as we know, global warming will cause ice-melting ices and engulfing many coastal cities in the world that we are concerning. This problem will occur in the near future makes and governments must tackle by offering climate change scenarios. Maintaining green areas will help to control temperature and air conditioning. Besides, parks have advantages in drainage that helps decrease flooding in some areas of the big cities because of low green density. Therefore, benefits of parks bring for human is are great. We should not count short term to exchange our environment for developing residential areas or commercial areas to get benefits immediately but we must think about how our environment is in future if we do not have enough green areas.

As analyzed, maintaining and protecting environment is the most significant issue for developing and improving our quality life. Thus, I do not recommend that we can take some parks for targets are smaller and less important purposes, especially it will affect our environment and we will have to spend a lot of money and efforts for adjusting this mistake.

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7.5/10