Time : 2020-03-27 10:06:47
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Nowadays, there are a numerous number of public parks built for community's activities, which is highly valued by the citizens. However, recently, not a few of persons have been stating that this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. From my point of view, I think this opinion should be taken into account flexibly.
First of all, the ever growing population of each country all around the world is now one of the most urgent problems that government has to face seriously. Therefore, the accomodation as well as employment should be extended quickly so as to meet the residents' requirements; which will definitely lead to the consequence that some kinds of infrastructure such as public parks and pools ought to be pulled down to build up more companies and offices for business indeed. Moreover, not only will the residential areas be a difficult issue anymore but the general economics can also be boosted. Just by the disappearance of the public parks, the government may solve the problems efficiency.
On the other hand, the values of public parks are so undeniable that they can not be ruined easily. None turn down the advantages of a public park. It brings the citizens all together and helps enhance everyone’s good terms with each other while doing many interestingly social stuff. Furthermore, public parks are suitable places for all of the physical exercises, for instance, the daily jogging, yoga and playing sports and games. Additionally, the kids who live in a city can learn about the nature practically, instead of using electronic devices too much in order to play and study. A residential area which has a park usually attracts lots of families due to the certain benefits it brings about. The positive side of public parks can never be refused completely.
To sum up, although a number of people suggest that public parks should be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies, their significant advantages are still undeniable. Therefore pulling down the public parks for other economical purposes is not really appropriate, despite some practically good effects to the residents.


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Nowadays, there are a numerous number of public parks built for community's activities, which is highly valued by the citizens. However, recently, not a few of persons people have been stating that this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. From my point of view, I think this opinion should be taken into account flexibly.

First of all, the ever growing population of each country all around the world is now one of the most urgent problems that governments have to face seriously. Therefore, the accommodation as well as employment should be extended quickly so as to meet the residents' requirements; which will definitely lead to the consequence that some kinds of infrastructure such as public parks and pools ought to be pulled down to build up more companies and offices for business indeed. Moreover, not only will The issue of residential areas will not be a difficult issue anymore. Moreover, but the general economics can also be boosted. Just by the disappearance of the public parks, the governments may solve the problems effectively.

On the other hand, the values of public parks are so undeniable that they cannot be ruined easily. No one turn down denies the advantages benefits of a public park. It brings the citizens all together and helps enhance everyone’s good terms with each other while doing serving many interestingly social stuffs. Furthermore, public parks are suitable places for all of the physical exercises, for instance, the daily jogging, yoga and playing sports and games. Additionally, the kids who live in a city can learn about the nature practically, instead of using electronic devices too much in order to play and study. A residential area which has a park usually attracts lots of families due to thanks to the certain benefits it brings about. The positive side of public parks can never be refused completely.

To sum up, although a number of people suggest that public parks should be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies, their significant advantages benefits are still undeniable. Therefore pulling down the public parks for other economical purposes is not really appropriate, despite some practically good effects to the residents.

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